Thursday, June 13, 2013

An Excerpt From My Novel

Hello Dearies! Today I thought it would be nice to share an excerpt from my current novel. None of this is set in stone, but this is a little sample. I hope you enjoy!


          I wish I could tell you about my past. About my favorite childhood memory, my family, my best and worst moments… But the truth is, at that moment, I had no recollection of memories from my life. Not even a single one. It was as if someone had delicately extracted all of them, leaving me uncertain as to who I was.
          In a daze, I peeled my eyes open, waiting for my senses to adjust to the frigid, night air. With numb fingers, I clawed the ground to get my hands under me and supported myself weakly. Gnarled roots laced the bare ground, creating a maze of wooden snakes, and revealing dirt randomly.
          Although every square inch of my body protested, I clambered to my feet and attempted at balancing myself. As dizzy as I was, my feet somehow took on a mind of their own, leading me blindly through the forest. I was unaware as to how long I’d been stumbling through the trees, tripping over roots at every turn, but, eventually, I came to a mysterious river of blackness. It was thick and hardly moved at all, which I found strange. The only thing that led me to believe it was some sort of exotic river was that the moonlight danced off of it. I stood there in awe and transfix, wondering what substance formulated that black river, when, suddenly, a creature came barreling from up stream. The creature had eyes as bright as the sun and blinded me, prompting me to fall backward. I dropped to the ground before the black river and slipped into a state of unconsciousness. 



Thoughts? Let me know! 

2 comments:

  1. I really really like this a lot, the description and words you use are perfect and keep the imagery really strong! If I can offer one suggestion? :) at the beginning you seem to be talking in the present tense and then without warning you switched to past tense... Just something I noticed.

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    1. I noticed that, too. I've been contemplating it. The story is supposed to be written in past-tense, though. At the moment, I'm not sure how I'm going to deal with that, but thank you for your input! I appreciate your comment!

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